This weeks Friday Fiction is from a photo prompt over at Friday Fictioneers. I hope you enjoy. Please feel free to share your thoughts. Have a great weekend! 😉
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“It’s true,” I say as Marcus, Patrick, and Jenny pile in the elevator.
“We’ll meet you at the top,” Marcus says pulling the heavy cage into place.
As the elevator creeps by Patrick shouts, “Up, up and away.”
The elevator coughs up smoke and ash as it sputters between the seventh and ninth floors.
Suddenly a fireball consumes the elevator.
Trapped. They bang on the cage and cry for help.
Petrified, I can only listen to their cries.
Silence comes quickly.
The fireball retreats and the elevator belches smoke and ash.
The cage opens and I peer inside. No trace they were ever there.
Consumed.
Photo Credit: Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Word Count: 100 + 5
20/20 Hines Sight 
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers! Good story and well done. Not only don’t I like elevators, but I don’t entirely trust escalators either. I know I’m not in control. Of course, I’ve also had accidents on stairs so I just can’t win.
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Thanks for stopping by and I’m glad you enjoyed. Escalators can be pretty precarious too, especially when they just stop for no reason. I can’t say I know about accidents on stairs, but my sister has taken a tumble down the stairs multiple times.
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How sad that they refused to listen to the narrator!Wonder if the elevator was cursed or haunted?A wonderfully horrific tale-loved it:-)
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I’m glad you enjoyed. It is unfortunate they didn’t listen. And yes you do have to wonder what’s up. Is the elevator cursed or haunted or maybe it has something to do with the narrator or the building. Lot’s of variables. Hmm maybe I’ll expand this. Thanks for the idea. 😉
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Will look forward to the expansion 🙂
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I USED to like elevators – stairs are looking better all the time 🙂 Good story, Nan
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Thanks Nan, I’m glad you enjoyed. There seems to be a bit of a running theme here in which I’ve turned people off from elevators. 😉
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You lured them there on purpose, didn’t you? A clever way to get rid of someone.
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Oh Adam, why would I do that? 😉 But it definitely would seem that way? Thanks for dropping by.
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Welcome to the Fictioneers. Your first story and you’ve already killed off all but one of your characters. You’ll do fine. 🙂
janet
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thanks for visiting and the welcome. Haha. Interesting you should say that. I was just going over some of my other stories and I’ve killed off quite a few of them.
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Wow! Without a trace … nice!
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Thanks for stopping by and I’m glad you enjoyed.
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From now on I take the stairs. An explosive piece.
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Thanks for the visit, Patrick. I often take the stairs and not necessarily for the exercise. I’ve had the pleasure of being stuck in an elevator or two and it’s quite nerve racking.
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Dear Hines,
Now that’s a fiery ride. I’ll think twice before boarding an elevator.
Welcome to Friday Fictioneers.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle for stopping by and the welcome. Sometimes elevators can be a bit precarious and temperamental.
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